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    dots Submission Name: Dance with Luciferdots

    Author: goodcarmacurley
    ASL Info:    40/female/nevada
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 8/10/5
    Words: 311
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsDance with Luciferdots

    Hey Hey, My My…
    Out of the Blue and Into the Black….

    My heart is dark today. It beats, but very slight. This rollercoaster ride, ending near. I can feel it slowing and fear inside speeds. Odd now isn’t it? The steep climb and fast jolts are what I crave. The calming end scares me most. I’ll step off and cash my ticket in. Or wait, will I ride? Only the weary stay aboard. I know these twists and turns, highs and lows. Again my heart is dark.

    I don’t know how in my sick life to explain, and/or justify my sorrow. My laughter and smile hide the sad, worn and darkest moments. My sorrow is just sorrow, it has no mask. Some may understand and like myself live it. Others shun and believe I am weak. I make no judgment on either. I know my strength.. Time… today I must reach deep within my soul and pull that strength out. Set it free, and do the right thing.

    My wise Momma says, “You dance, you pay the fiddler.” And so the fiddler plays his last tune. My dance with Lucifer has come to an end. I will pay… the cost? Time will tell. I yearn for this to be the beginning of the end.

    As I gaze back and ponder, was it worth any price? No, Not today. Then, would I change my past if given the chance? No, Not today.

    Maybe “time”, my price to dance, will lighten my soul. Allow what is dark and cold to find the warm light. Peace, existing out of the Black.


    October 29th, 2005

    Submitted on 2007-11-14 03:05:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is fabulous! a fave! (btw, i hope this is just fiction). anyway, you do an awesome job conveying the narrator's despair here.

    welcome to es - i'm sure i'll be reading more of your work here.

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this alot Carm! Your style of writing kind of reminds me of my own. We are always looking for a way out I think? Well being there myself I get every meaning in this, Great write and I hope to read much more from you.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
    I hope you are out of the blue, the black, and the dark now. This was very well written. It was very inviting, but I've found in my life that despair can be very seductive. Not to say that's what you're writing about, but those dark places can be inviting. Well done, but hopefully I see happier things from you :)

    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      this made me cry it was dark but sweet all at the same time. M.
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by mekisha4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all welcome to elite skills.

    My take on this is that is a longing to find an end to pain that has been part of you for a long time.
    There is a deep sadness here but there is also hope hidden within the darkness of the write.

    You dance you pay the fiddler. Haven;t heard that in years but it still remains the same good or bad.

    Many people have paid the fiddler in one way or another. To dance with lucifer says that you have lived on the wild side of life and the effects are still there.
    I myself have danced on the dark side but in the long run we all must sit one out.

    I like this and hopefully it is just a write and not a ticket being punched.

    Again welcome to elite where we all have a story to tell. You just have to read between the lines to find it and appreciate it.

    Respect and Admiration

    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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