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    dots Submission Name: A Paganing Prayerdots
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    Author: magickandie
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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       My daughters will be doing their Paganing this coming night. This is the prayer I wrote to mark this special occasion.

    Note: A Paganing is the equivilant to a Christian baptisim.


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    Blessed be,
    This is for all to see,
    My daugters before My Lord and Lady,
    On this summer night so dark and shady.

    My Lord,
    As fierce and bright,
    As My Lady,
    So fair and light.

    I ask this boon of You,
    Shine down on them,
    Day and night.

    Guide thier hands,
    And guide thier hearts,
    That they would walk the path of beauty and light,
    That they do what they know is right.

    This is the boon I ask,
    This is what I wish,
    As it is said,
    Grant me this gift.





    Submitted on 2004-06-24 03:12:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Woohoo! Did you write this for their Wiccaning? Would be very good for it. This is really lovely, and the Gods love it when poets write poems for them, and this is just really lovely written. I love what the them was, and it's a lessing to have children, and it's lovely that you would want them to walk on the path of the God and Goddess. Blessed be to yourself.
    Walk in Love and Light,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      i was raised pagan and i trully love what you have written. Its for children so of course it's not complicated. Simple is sometimes best. I never understood why people seem to think you should need a dictionary for a peice of poetry to be good.

    The only suggestion i have is this line

    This is the boon I ask,
    This what I wish,

    This what i wish just does not sound right, Purhaps this is what i wish?
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by WandWielder | [ Reply to This ]
      -cough- lol i meant end every comment with Blessed Be... and now that i corrected that i have to ramble on about something so i have enough words to allow me to post this comment, so i'll tell you a little something about myself in the mean time... I just moved here from washington state from malaysia where i lived for two years, it was there that i found true meaning in life... by looking within... kind of like the pagan view on life i believe the human spirit holds the potential to all things, it makes everything and anything possible... it gives hope... and so, if you notice, most of my work is based on hope, or potential, or possibility... or peace... pure peace and serentity... soo i think this should be enough to keep my wording up without allow me to send this comment... sorry for the stupid rambling... and Merry Meet Magical Lady... as well Blessed be...

    travis
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      Ack i just commented on this but fer some reason it didn't go through... so allow me to start again... first off i'm in love with the wonderful spirit about this poem... I'm not a Pagan but from what i've read and what i've seen it seems to be a healthy way to be... allowing your spirit to shine through is a very gracious way to grow... I enjoy very much how you wrote this for your daughter, it goes beyond motherly... it transforms you into a kind of guardian angel... very divine... This poem is a favorite to me in every way... from it's perfect and beautiful flow, to it's non stop very natural rhyme... and then the message, every perception of it makes my spirit soar... it's remarkably lovely my friend... yes a deffinate favorite... and i love how you start all yer comments with Blessed Be... it sets me up with a smile heheee thank you... i hope to hear a lot more from you and read a lot more of yer work as well... take care my friend...

    Travis
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      Other than not quite knowing what a boon is [I assume it's some sort of request], this is another nice little prayer. I like the way you wrote this.

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      What a nice dedication 2 your children on an obviously special night. As mothers we pray constantly to Great Spirit for the love & guidance of our children.

    It sounds very interesting! is that relative to Hades or ?
    believe me, i know how it goes not to have your babe(s) with you ~ my ex has our son out-of-state.
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I do not know of these ways, but I do appreciate the piece, the love that is involved and the dedication.. I felt the feeling in this.
    | Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      I get a feeling of excitement and anticipation when I read this. How sweet. I, myself, wasn't really raised as anything really. The closest thing I was raised as was a Christian but not really. My mom was some form of Catholic and my dad is...well, I don't know what my is. My point is, however, that I chose my own path. Well, actually, it was more of a calling. I'm glad for what I have chosen. When I have children of my own, I will raise them to believe in what they feel is right. Sure, I'll tell them how I believe, but I will also tell them that they don't have to believe the way I do. I really liked this little ditty and think you should keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by Victoria | [ Reply to This ]
      Errr, I've never heard of a "paganing".
    I've heard of wiccanings.

    I always thought that Pagans who baptise their children as pagans were very narrow minded. It's all about freedom of religion, and choosing the paths that unfold before you in life, right? So many pagans are screaming in indignance that they were baptised christians before they had a chance to choose their own religion. Why have you chosen your daughter's?

    I have two children, one of whom was baptised a christian as I bowed to family pressure in Holy Catholic Ireland. The other child has not been baptised, by his birth I had decided that neither of my children will be influenced by my ideals of what is or is not good religion. So right now they celebrate a few major holidays that they become aware of and are interested in, they celebrate the sabbats with me, they will not do religion at school and I am going to have great fun with them as they grow up, introducing them to every aspect of religion that I can find. We're gonna go to mosques, temples, churches, shrines, we're going to celebrate Hanukah and Ramadan and Diwali and Christmas and Halloween and then when they are eighteen they will have a balanced view of what religion is and what they like.
    I wouldn't foist my opinion on anyone. Why the hell would I try and heap my beliefs on them?

    As far as this poem/prayer goes, it's a bit bland and boring. Why not fill it with some more information, more description? There's a SO much in paganism, it's not all Blessed Be and Lord and Lady... there is love, kindness, compassion, beauty, joy, nature..
    You have plenty of scope to work from.

    By the way, I'm a witch, and used to run my own coven. I do know what I'm talking about.
    | Posted on 2004-06-24 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      i was raised by a pagan and i truley do appreciate what you have written for your daughters. i'm personally an Asatru myself but i think and believe this is truly a beautiful prayer
    | Posted on 2004-06-24 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]


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