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    dots Submission Name: Whispers of Paindots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhispers of Paindots
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    Itís Seven AM,
    Yet, I wake with regret,
    Just to see the sun rise,
    With you in pieces,
    Sheets, with bleach spots.
    Then some secrets,
    Thrown on the floor,
    Cause Iíve been sleepless,

    And now I wake up the next mourning,
    Thinking that Iím insane,
    Because all I hear is a whisper,
    The way you whisper my name,

    Over some cover story,
    Front page news
    Who said last night,
    Was just for the snooze?
    I was awake for it all,
    When he was up for abuse,
    When he gave you a scar, cut,
    Blunted blow and bruise,

    And all that night,
    I watched you cry,
    From miles away,
    I watched you die,
    Couldnít do a thing about it,
    To save you inside,
    You were wondering where,
    I was at, wondering why,

    And now I wake up the next mourning,
    Thinking that Iím insane,
    Because all I hear is a whisper,
    The way you whisper my name,
    All I can think of is what you,
    You and all of you pain,
    The next mourning,
    And the whispers of pain

    I was awake for it all,
    When he was up for abuse,
    When he gave you a scar, cut,
    Blunted blow and bruise,




    Submitted on 2007-11-14 08:03:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi this was very good slow and subtle tone but has a lot of meaning
    i liked it alot and by the way i didnt understand what you were saying in yor message

    great piece

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the slow sort of undertow feeling I got from this.

    It has a nice slow rythm that works well for this poem.

    good job!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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