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    dots Submission Name: "When I Leave and Take The Wind"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 1683/1145/181
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 240
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots"When I Leave and Take The Wind"dots
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    When I leave and take the wind
    and mist shrouds the Island's shore,
    my journey starts but longing begins
    as I am leaving you once more.

    When the Trade Winds fill my vessel's sail
    and push my ship towards war,
    my thoughts will fondly return to you
    whom I will love forevermore.

    You have nursed my wounds and borne my sons
    and kept my cares at bay.
    It's almost more than I can bear
    just to be away.

    Through shot and shell I will not fear
    for I will see your face.
    I'll see your smile and lovingly
    remember your embrace.

    And when our mission comes to end,
    and our ship's bow turns towards home,
    my heart will race before the ship,
    with the Dolphins and the foam.

    And when our Island comes in view,
    my real life will begin,
    back in your arms until again,
    I must leave and take the wind.

    Ron Cole
    November 2007




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      im not really sure what to say. all i know is that i really like it. it was so heartfelt and strong. nice job.
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron, this was just very emotionally powerful and a vision of love, loveliness and loneliness and so much more.

    I needed this after a long day to just center myself on! Many gracious thanks!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a truly beautiful poem. Spoken as a true romantic. Why is it that so many of your poems have to do with war?
    Mystery, mystery.
    "I must leave and take the wind"
    That is an earth-shattering line, the perfect ending to this poem.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem of the steadfast and true sailor. Throughout the poem you paint lovely images and feelings, and the last line is brilliant!
    Well done, Ron!
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron, I love this poem. It is a testimony to true love. I especially loved the second to last verse;

    'And when our mission comes to end,
    and our ship's bow turns towards home,
    my heart will race before the ship,
    with the Dolfins and the foam.'

    this expresses an eagerness to be back with the one who is loved. Very well written and rhymed. thank you. Jerilynn
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      My friend Ron I must commend you on this lovely piece and also command you to take a very well earned bow. I am immediately adding this one to my list of favorites. You have struck pure gold.
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, romance and the sea, the romance OF the sea! ... not many more romantic topics than this! wonderfully and very deftly done .... bravo!!! bravo!!!
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron,
    You wouldn't by chance like actually be some famous country singer/song-writer? (if not you should consider)
    This is a beautiful story/tribute ~ love song, everything wrapped in a package of gold.

    It's the letter sent home from a soldier of yesterday/a soldier of today. It transends time, generations, viewpoints...which really makes it good. Good probably is not my word, but it's all I'm grasping at right now - the read has sort of left me in awe.

    Excellent write,
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
       Great! I like how this wonderful poem begins and ends with nearly the same words... So, Poet-Warrior, whenever you leave your home for a long and uncertain voyage, you leave your heart behind wrapped inside a poem!! This one is perfect! Excellent in every dimension!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      You did really well! I liked it before and even more now, Ron. I always find ways I can improve my own poetry, too, if I just let the poem sit and get "cold." That way I can read it as if I did not personally write it. L0L---There's always a little tweaking to do for those of us trying to get the words just right. I hope to see a bunch of new posts from you when I get back to Elite about December 1! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I have read this one before Ron? Maybe not. I always enjoys reading your work. Its like puting my soul at ease(smile) Your a great writer Ron. Keep up the great work.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
       This is amazing Ron, I've gotta just be a copycat here and agree with the others - I'm misty eyed and completely dumbfounded by your ability to portray pure emotion in your work. Another great from a legend xx

    in awe
    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      wow Ron...what can i say??
    i have to agree with the others...this is superb!!
    I too had a lump in my throat, I felt the tears well up with this one.
    true beauty...you are a master.
    each verse glides smoothy into the next, as i read it, i noticed no glitches in rhyme or rhythm at all.
    you are an inspiration, Ron.
    Keep 'em comin'!!
    as Matt says...unreal :)
    Michelle xxxxxx
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Your verse could be send by many who must leave their loved ones behind for long periods of time. I got a lump in my throat reading it and remembering how many face these tearful goodbyes. Very well-written, Ron! Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this not the subject but how you represented it. Very well written with a heart-wrenching ending.


    Teary-eyed,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Seriously Ron that is some A class, On form, Talent displaying brilliance if your looking from my point of view.
    Unreal!

    Matt
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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