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    dots Submission Name: My body doesnít workdots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy body doesnít workdots
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    My body doesnít work


    My heart is always kicking up a fuss
    And Iím lucky if my brain kicks at all
    My knees are about to rust
    And my metabolism has hit the brick wall
    But Iíll pick myself back up
    And try and learn to crawl
    But if I donít
    You cant expect me not to groan
    Because my body doesnít work
    And its driving my biserk

    My lungs stopped working twenty years ago
    And my rhythm section has forgotten how to flow
    My hands are about to break
    And my voice box shouts ďoh for heavens sakeĒ
    I cant be bothered to pick myself up
    I would much rather kick myself down
    Because after all
    Iím being drowned by a waterfall
    And my body doesnít work
    My body doesnít seem to work




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