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    dots Submission Name: Bridges and Heartsdots
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    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I know this is really cheesy and bad, but please deal with me.


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    dotsBridges and Heartsdots
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    You crossed the bridge inside of me
    Taking my heart
    Then you burned my bridge to the ground
    So no one could cross it ever again
    Your on the edge of your bridge
    Waving with a big grin
    With my heart tucked under your arm.

    Give me back my heart
    I do not want this pain
    I want to be able to love again
    Just because you think you won
    Doesn't mean you get a consolation prize.

    Never mind, forget it
    I'll build a new bridge
    And grow a new heart
    After all everyone can
    Broken hearts can be mended
    And boys can become men.

    Let's just wait to see how long
    It takes for you to really win
    Then you'll see the truth
    Behind the words I say
    But for now I'll continue
    Building my bridge and growing my heart.




    Submitted on 2007-11-14 16:05:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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