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    dots Submission Name: Driving Home In Novemberdots

    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDriving Home In Novemberdots

    Edging the highway,
    trees the color of smoke.
    Brittle and ashen faced bark
    reaching up. And below
    roots walk in leaves
    that sound like burning.
    Soft brushes of sunset shades
    still crackling damp and dark.
    The sky smells like snow,
    lush fabric of woven ice,
    gray and wet and cold.
    Closing my eyes this moment,
    even tears taste like winter.

    Submitted on 2007-11-14 19:55:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this was just beautifully written, I love your greyish description of sorrow, and you really painted a beautiful picture. I also liked your use of alliteration; I can almost hear the roots walking on the leaves. Whatever happened in your life, one cannot help to feel sorry for you,, most people know exactly how you feel, and I can certainly relate.

    I loved it.
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]

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