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    dots Submission Name: Six months, Two weeksdots
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    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSix months, Two weeksdots
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    Six months and two weeks
    Since the end of you and me
    But I am doing good
    I'm happy and smiling
    Something I rarely did with you
    I thought I was in love
    But love is never that painful
    I just wanted someone to care
    And you did for a while
    But then you sucked my hopes dry
    Well now I know
    That your nothing more
    Then a waste of my precious time
    Go back to your guitar
    And your pathetic no good life
    Suck the hopes away from someone else
    'Cause for now
    I live my own dreams.

    Six months and two weeks ago
    You were finally gone.




    Submitted on 2007-11-14 21:23:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very positive message that I'm sure a lot of people might need. Very abstract though, you may get better cirtique if your more concrete.
    | Posted on 2007-11-14 00:00:00 | by fate_s nemisis | [ Reply to This ]


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