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    dots Submission Name: You Wouldn't Catch Medots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 603
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 952



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       Just thinking...and I stole the line that keeps repeating from some graphics on someone else's page...


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    dotsYou Wouldn't Catch Medots
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    I want to fall for you, but I'm not sure you'll catch me
    You're open to love, just not my love
    I'm not so sure you deserved it anyway
    I just felt there may have been something there.

    I want to fall for you, but I'm not sure you'll catch me
    Sometimes, I think you'll live for no one but yourself
    I think the two of us could be amazing
    But you're probably hung up on appearances

    I want to fall for you, but I'm not sure you'll catch me
    You say you not wanting me means we're not meant to be
    It sounds like bullshit to my ears
    But then again, have you ever told me the truth?

    I want to fall for you, but I'm not sure you'll catch me
    In fact, I'm pretty sure you won't.
    You already warned me of your nature
    It was my own stupidity that got me this far.




    Submitted on 2007-11-15 00:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      One day, when you least expect it, the right guy is going to come along and sweep you right off of your feet. There will be no games, no guessing and no regret. It shall happen...it always does.
    | Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this.

    "I want to fall for you, but I'm not sure you'll catch me
    Sometimes, I think you'll live for no one but yourself
    I think the two of us could be amazing
    But you're probably hung up on appearances"

    was my favorite stanza. especially,

    "I think the two of us could be amazing"

    there's something about that line that is pure and innocent to me. it reminds me a of something a girl i care a great deal for would say.

    as for stealing the reoccuring line, it happens. its only stealing if you just use it and dont add anything original to it, in my opinion. i think that line inspired you and you took it and made a very simple, honest, and vulnerable poem with it.

    this was innocent and pure and im glad you wrote it. liking someone who doesnt like [censored]s. alot.

    i hope your heart can heal.

    xo.
    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh. My. Gosh. This poem was very depressing, I'm sorry you feel this way, I've felt like this too. I love poems that have repeating lines, it shows a strong emotion that you try to get out there, you are obviously trying to tell us something important. has anyone said "I love you, get better." Lately? Keep up these awesome poems!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by jasonsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]
      Not Bad at all
    I can see you almost made the biggest mistake of all in Love and that is Looking For Love
    I Strongly believe True Love has to come to you you cant go searching for it
    Normally I frown upon repeated lines but in this write the repetitive use of the same first line in every stanza carried very well
    Another Good Quality write from you
    Its a Pleasure reading your writes as you are not afraid to experiment with different styles
    To many people fall into that trap of writing every write in the same style
    I applaud you for not falling into that trap
    Great Work
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I know how you feel, i was in the exact same position a few years back, where you feel this great chemistry but just not sure if you should pursue a certain relationship,
    i soon realized it was not the other person, it was me, i was afraid to jump in. I was afraid to get hurt and to be
    disappointed. At the end of the day i jumped, together for almost 5 years now. Sometime its worth the risk, if you fall, you will stand up and go on.

    I liked your poem.
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]


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