Until We Go Blind -------------------------------------------
When I look at your face
it's as though I looked at something incandescent,
for when I turn my eyes and blink,
I see an afterimage
of your perfect face
like I see after looking at a naked light bulb,
but I rarely turn away.
My eyes are glued to you
and yours to me
like stationary rays from airport beacons.
I suppose that we'll stand here
smiling and staring
until we go blind.
I feel like your poetry needs punctuationů I'm sorry if that would be cramping your particular style. I think some of the impact is lostů It makes it feel unfinished, to me. But I really like this piece, especially the ending. Becky
i liked the use of "something incandescent". "incandescent" always brings a smile because for me, it's not just about glowing, it's also about radiating happiness. i did go through a phase when i felt like that but that ended!
Sounds like the two people are so enamored of each other that they are becoming lost in each other. Like deer caught in the headlights of each others eyes. I have been caught in a stare like that. Breathless and waiting...not wanting to speak and spoil the moment. But, alas, moments like these are so fleeting and rare, which is probably a good thing, or we'd get nothing done...
i could almost see spots before my eyes as i read this! those naked light bulbs can be brutal! lol! it is like an infatuation thing, and chances are you will go blind (metaphorically) and it will end as the infatuation settles down. or not! anyway, i liked the metaphor in this one about staring at each other until you go blind, 'cause i've been there! have a great day!
somepeople leave rather interesting comments...anyways...i like this...that last three lines i really like...the part about the naked lightbulb...is an interesting thought...well anyways i shouldnt comment on peoples stuff till ive had coffee lol...smiles ange
This condition is known as infatuation or "being in love". The condition cannot last for more than 2 years after marriage. Thereafter, if you really work hard at it, you may learn to love the other person, maybe, if you're really lucky, the other person may learn to love you as well. In the meantime, this is nice, but only animal mating instincts. Since we're not animals, its dangerous. Sermon ends...sorry.