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    dots Submission Name: Streched Entirely to Thindots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Trapped
    Total Views: 931
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 471



    Description:
       My thoughts right about now...


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    dotsStreched Entirely to Thindots
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    The pulling...
    tearing...
    And ripping...
    Of my skin...
    Streched entirely to thin...
    my soul...
    my brain...
    this pain driving me insane going against the grain...
    Pain...
    who I ask is to blame???
    The only thing that comes to mind is my name...
    I am to blame...
    I am so ashamed....
    Am I Insane...
    Insanity...
    words soaked in blasphemy meant for you or me...




    Submitted on 2007-11-15 08:38:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me that many things are moulded, stretched, and pounded while being made ready for their final form! There is much feeling and much intensity in this verse, showing a passionate and artistic soul, which I believe you have, lovely lady!

    Kahlil Gibram wrote concerning his poem on Love in "The Prophet"

    Like sheathes of corn he gathers you unto himself.
    He threshes you to make you naked.
    He sifts you to free you from your husks.
    He grinds you to whitness.
    He kneads you until you are pliant;
    and then he assigns you to his sacred fire, that you may become sacred bread for God's sacred feast.

    | Posted on 2008-05-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel this wat all the time(smile)
    Great write!!! Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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