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    dots Submission Name: Are youdots

    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 596
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsAre youdots

    You say Iím so quiet,
    But what do you want,
    Tell me how you want me,
    Thereís no middle point with you,
    Nothingís comfortable,
    Awkward silence always fills,

    Yet why do I want you near,
    The music fills me,
    Swells in emotion and pours from inside,
    Feeling myself break,
    Giving in to the urges,
    Oh how I want you near,
    To kiss and to hold,

    A path from my heart pulls,
    In a salty form that spills,
    Over my eyes on to my cheeks,
    The tears flood my mind,
    Just longing, hoping, wanting,
    With everything I am,
    That you will turn into my dream come true,

    Submitted on 2007-11-15 11:19:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You write love poetry with grace and an exquisite flair for emotional expression! This was a delightful, excellent poem!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh the feeling of longing is expressed very well in this poem. I like the way you look at life.
    Sometimes it can get you down and sometimes its great, but most of the time were somewhere in the middle.
    Thanks for sharing
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]

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