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    dots Submission Name: Attempted Denialdots

    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 756
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1492

       Built this poem, heavily laden with recent emotions, around a refrain that came to my head. Can be worked into a song if it's less wordy.

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    dotsAttempted Denialdots

    That day was a momentous one by all means of reckoning
    A day the likes of which aren't oft recurring
    Indeed the portents were good in its eager coming
    I have since wondered if it'd ever be repeating

    But I never saw you
    You were never there
    I never once intended
    On catching sight of you

    The wayfarer's call greets me in my endless wanderings
    Like a madman in the streets I'm ever roaming
    And yet in the midst of all this I can't help remembering
    Our solitary adventure in that momentous meeting

    But I never saw you
    You were never there
    I just want to forget
    Any recollections of you

    Can I help being so unwary in my cursed emotions
    Or should I have tried to stop what was already in motion?
    Impaled and cut deep by the wounds of passion
    I tried but I cannot suppress my heedless reactions

    But I never saw you
    You were never there
    I don't even want to think
    That I could ever love you

    I never tried to even contemplate how things should be
    At all times I was immersed in matters pertaining to me
    And yet now I realise as anyone could see
    That something strange and unusual has happened to me

    But I never saw you
    You were never there
    It's just not like me
    To feel this way about you.

    Submitted on 2007-11-15 11:34:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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