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    dots Submission Name: Symphony to a wise womandots
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    Author: Tradia
    ASL Info:    17/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.02 - 13/28/26
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I was reading a book and decided to write it.


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    dotsSymphony to a wise womandots
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    She woke up to see the light
    to wonder at the night
    to live otuside
    prejudice or lies

    She did not reawaken
    to live life judging
    or preying
    on someone else's life

    If a stone must be thrown
    She will not raise her hand
    her sins are hers to keep
    and yours, are yours to live

    Gossip will not cross her lips
    because for that she is mute
    she prefers to listen to baby cry
    than to someone preaching lies

    Blind she will be
    to people's hypocrisies
    and crippled when it comes to
    dancing on a fallen woman's grave

    Because she fell
    because she knows
    what it feels to live
    at the other side of the stone

    She will not hear
    of your sins and your lies
    you cooked your meat
    and is yours to eat

    She will not share
    someone elses cruel jokes
    because she fell
    she knows what it feels to be on the other side of the fence

    She woke up to see the light
    to wonder at the night
    to live otuside
    prejudice or lies






    Submitted on 2007-11-15 11:38:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to live [otuside] = outside
    she prefers to listen to [a]? baby cry
    to live [otuside] = outside


    in some ways this reads to me as if someone has converted to a religion. my mind makes connections with christianity though that is just me.

    i think i have read this before? or something similar? there are a coupla images that seem very familiar to me...

    i think it is a good thing to see the error of your ways. to see the way that your life and the way you are living it is not contributing healthily to the progress of yourself or of those around you. but it is hard to change the things that seem like second nature... the instinct to listen to gossip and pass it on... the ease with which we judge others

    but it is hard to make the changes necessary. its hard to retrain ourselves to live our lives on a different level. one above the fickle judging and gossiping that we have been used to. one that is above throwing stones and righting wrongs...

    there is definately wisdom within these lines and a clue as to a better plane upon which we all could live.
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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