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    dots Submission Name: Take The Bass Line Outdots
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    Author: always_confused
    ASL Info:    16/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 4/9/21
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 137
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 356



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    dotsTake The Bass Line Outdots
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    listening to one thing
    hearing echos of millions
    too much to focus
    the mind races to catch up
    ...
    apple picking
    backwoods boy
    fairytale princess
    yes, no, & maybe
    floating
    read it again
    almost there
    proving them wrong
    somewhere, someplace
    it is what it is




    Submitted on 2007-11-15 15:46:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice concept.

    I like how you describe the mess you see in front of you, and then give those few examples. But im not quite sure what you do after, not quite sure what the ending is. Is it acceptance that the world is esentially the mess you describe, but somewhere you will find what it is you're looking for?

    That could be completely off, but that's what I got from it. I like almost everything, though the ending is a bit confusing. good piece.
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Maybe | [ Reply to This ]



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