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    dots Submission Name: a dreamdots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 1145
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1381



    Description:
       I almost wish that I was still dreaming


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    It was a beautiful dream
    In it I was a Tigress, and I was free and the air was clean
    I ran with the wind, not against it, and my old Strength was back, inside me, a part of me
    It was a beautiful dream
    I lay on my back in the sun, the waters clear, the sand cool
    I watched the monkeys play their games with a drowsy awareness that one wrong step and I could eat them whole
    It was a beautiful dream
    I felt claws pierce my belly and the blood that ran forth was like a waterfall of crimson silk
    I fought with a vicious ferocity that made the silly cub recoil into the night
    It was a horrible dream
    I could not breathe and the night pulsed with life that I could not feel
    I felt so weak, and was defenseless when it came
    It was a horrible dream
    And then I awoke
    To find the claws in my belly were my own
    And to see that the shadows of life were real, and scared
    It was all a horrible dream
    My head ached and I could not breathe
    The shadows said I would be fine, that all of this would pass away
    It was all a horrible dream
    My shadow finally left my side
    Left me to try and dig the fears from my mind
    It was all a horibble dream
    And now I sit here weak as a kitten
    Knowing that I must be the Tigress that lurks beneath




    Submitted on 2007-11-15 15:48:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "And now I sit here weak as a kitten
    Knowing that I must be the Tigress that lurks beneath"


    Symbolically, I'll tell you what this meant to me: your wild feminine side in the form of a tiger wanting to break free of its cage, except, it can't, perhaps because of you feeling trapped in the real world by social constraints; after all, that passionate side of women is still seen as taboo in a lot of societies, I think. Perhaps it frightens men, makes men insecure that they're not necessarily the hunters at times.

    Also, there's an internal battle here between your (perceived soft exterior in the form of a) kitten and this wild tiger... such conflict... I think we all have this push and pull, conscious and subconscious stirrings...

    Dream symbology fascinates me so I found this especially interesting. Just my first take on it, nothing more.

    Jase
    | Posted on 2008-04-14 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Dreams can play tricks on the mind. Some seem so real that it must be real? You brought this to life with your descriptions and feelings.
    Great write!! Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      You've had an interesting dream there. Maybe even a message trying to tell you something. I always try to make sense of dreams like that. They have so many messages to learn from. I love the way you developped the idea of the tiger and the kitten.

    I somehow feel your title needs to include the main theme of this piece; the tiger. Somehow, it doesn't look like you're doing any justice to it by saying beautifully horrible. It looks more like a play of words rather than the meaning of the poem.

    I also felt like spacing were needed like stanzas or breaks. Space to breathe and absorb what your piece had to offer. you just go on with this dream without giving us the chance to admire the scenes that you have.

    Overall though, i thought your ideas ran like a waterfall; contiuously and without any hesitation. You seemed like you recalled the dream very vividly and you were able to bring me in your world. This piece will be on my mind for a while. You really made an impact on me. It was a wonderful write.

    Cheers,

    Irina
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      A twice potent and twice poignant dream and poem! the dream of the tigress...thou art the Tigress.... bravo... bravo... bravo!!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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