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    dots Submission Name: There Are Daysdots

    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 818
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Just something I needed to write, to get ongoing thoughts out of that place where thoughts are born.

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    dotsThere Are Daysdots

    How is it, when life throws you curves,
    you immediately dodge?
    Why can't I be so lucky?
    Life throws me straights,
    and I want a Royal Flush.
    Greed, I'm greedy I realize.
    I try to find answers to my questions,
    yet I keep finding more questions.
    I'm confused.
    My mind, no...not my mind...
    that place where thoughts
    are born.
    That place.
    That's where I'm confused
    and dark, blank and retreated.
    I can't seem to find the pull string
    for the blinds, to let the light in
    and open a window.
    It's dusty in here.
    I forgot my duster,
    and I'm hungry.
    Guess I'm going to have to
    eat thoughts of Dust Bunnies.

    Submitted on 2007-11-15 21:28:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hehe, I understand what you mean. I write alot, but alot of it is just crap, that needed to be written down so that the good stuff could come out. Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying that this poem is crap, quite the contrary actually, but I get why it was written. Loved it!

    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      Doll, you know, I think you figured out what my problem is. I don't write enough.

    So I'm stuck with an overabundance of dustbunnies!

    That last stanza by the way, is what really wrapped the whole poem up for me, and made it all click.

    Keep them comin!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      Really awsome...

    It's dusty in here.
    I forgot my duster,
    and I'm hungry.
    Guess I'm going to have to
    eat thoughts of Dust Bunnies.

    Dats really captivating !!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]
      Crazy,I love how you explained That your confusion didnt come from your mind but the place where thoughts are born, cool, you could have been really simple but chose to elaberate.
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]

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