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    dots Submission Name: November Skydots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 719
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    Description:
       for those who may not notice ever other line goes together as a story about a person then nature, then the person then nature. and lastly the person laying in nature. i love my november sky. my freind allways says 'good-bye-blue-sky' i love this saying. i think it sounds like a band name. who knows ether which way i love it!


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    dotsNovember Skydots
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    Get out of bed
    Its already light

    Birds in the meddow
    Dragonfly flight

    Put on your shoe’s
    And go to school

    Dancing morning dew
    Falls into a puddle-pool

    Run into class
    And learn allday

    The wind blows the grass
    Which is where I shall lay
    At the end of the day
    November not may
    I lie

    Under My November Sky




    Submitted on 2007-11-16 13:59:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was very simple, but the way i write is so wordy and contraditory and complex and laced with double or hidden meaning that i forget there are people out there to plagued with my style of writing, who can look at something as amazing as a november sky and put it into just a few words and still pack in all the meaning it deserves.

    now that was a run-on sentence.

    i really liked this. it was refreshing to me. sometimes i wish i could write like you.

    and i think goodbye-bluesky would be a cool band name.

    xo.
    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]


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