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    dots Submission Name: Dont You Leavedots
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    Author: enigmaticone
    ASL Info:    22/m/nh
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 16/36/23
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 116
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    dotsDont You Leavedots
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    Dont you leave
    Not yet
    You leave behind a broken soul
    Unfinshed business looms
    Dont you leave
    Her heart yearns to know you
    And spend the time she never had
    Her tears will fall
    To wash away the pain
    Forever gripped in her chest
    Your memory wont fade
    But still
    Dont walk away
    Dont you leave
    Your needed more than you know
    You just never had a chance to learn
    Dont walk away
    Dont you leave




    Submitted on 2007-11-16 16:47:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Her tears will fall
    To wash away the pain"

    that line is comes like the hardest of decisions. its real and really clever.

    you didnt leave a description. it left me wondering if you lost a friend or have a friend who is contemplating suicide. or even perhaps that you made this all up just for poetry's sake.

    either way, its sad and amazing. kind of like life itself.

    i lost my best friend five eyars ago. i saw him die in a car accident. and i have attempted suicide before. this piece hits and doesnt miss with me. i can definitely relate.

    its simply and thoughtfully written and i especially liked the line i put at the top of this comment. you have alot of talent.

    if you've lost a friend, or fear you may lose one, i dont really know what to say. sometimes experience doesnt bloom wisdom. even though ive been through these things, all i can say is the hurt is unimaginable and it never goes away, it just fades enough to allow you to keep on living somehow.

    i wish i could give you hope instead of hopelessness. but i can only give you what i have.

    xo.
    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]



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