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Author: Dying Young
ASL Info:    18 / F / Lebanon
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Want to feel apathetic?
Just drink wine
Want to forget your sorrow?
Just hear mine!

That day, when I've decided to flee
From the troubles in my life,
I turned around to see
No one but me!
To realize I basically had no life!

I've been walking with my heartache
Trying to reach serenity
But I don't want to live till eternity
In a time when even peace is fake

When you're rotting on planet earth
Avoid dreaming of perfections
Even saints have made sins
Don't believe their illusions

Locations are hard to identify,
When you live in the world of NOWHERE
So don't bother, don't even try
I'm not here, nor there...

After all I've been forced to test
I Knew,
Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt

But still,
I need a place to rest
A place where I could run from my faults
A place that could bear my thoughts

Where would I find such place?
It's right there!!
Somewhere ...
In the world of NOWHERE

Submitted on 2007-11-16 17:06:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Quite a treatise on day-dreaming,"I'm not hear....there."
"....I basically had no the world of NOWHERE."
"Im not here..there........where I from.. faults......NOWHERE."
| Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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