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    dots Submission Name: Still Afraiddots
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    Author: Me Rambling
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    Words: 296
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    dotsStill Afraiddots
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    Would you take my hand again,
    If it meant we could take everything
    That we once left behind,
    And start anew for a little while,
    If it meant we would not stay?

    Would you take that chance again,
    Walk down the same road that we had walked,
    A thousand times before,
    Would you please just comfort me,
    Tell me that I could have it all again.

    No I'm not alone,
    But I'm still afraid

    Tell me that we'd have had a life together,
    Had I just been a better man to you

    Would you take my hand again,
    Give me a chance to see what my life,
    Could have been like today
    Would you allow me to please this dream,
    Then I'd leave you to yourself

    Would you take that chance again?
    Just tell me it wasn't all my fault,
    And it could not be helped,
    Tell me this is where I should be now,
    Not alone but still afraid

    No I'm not alone,
    But I'm still afraid

    Tell me that we'd have had a life together,
    Had I just been a better man to you

    Oh how I've tried to take control of life,
    But this life has had its way with me,
    And every day has been a test,
    The proving grounds of my sanity
    I'd give everything I am,
    To walk with you hand and hand,
    Down the path that leads to future memories,
    Just one more time

    No I'm not alone today,
    But yes I'm still afraid
    Afraid of what will come,
    And what I will never find

    No I'm not alone today,
    But yes I'm still afraid,
    Afraid those days are gone,
    And how I'll always miss us






    Submitted on 2007-11-16 17:42:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im such a dork.
    i was about to tell you these would make awesome lyrics but then i realised theyre sposed to be!
    sorry for my moment of slowness.


    its always hard looking back on something that seemed so perfect... even after it ended.
    to look back and see all the things you could have done to keep it from ending.
    to wonder whether the other person condemns you the way you do.
    to see everything in such a new light that only hindsight can bring.

    and thats what this song is about.

    to be a better man. thats a promise right there. but how many times has this promise been uttered and not realised? not fulfilled?

    some times i think we could have changed things and it still wouldnt have worked.
    some times we create a fairytale out of a very stressful, painful, impossible relationship as time goes on and the hurt lesens.

    but some times we fear that we may have thrown "it" away.
    "it" being the metaphorical "the one" that we all seem to search for.
    and what then...?

    what makes me sad about ths song Rob is that you dont seem to be asking her back forever... just to see whether it would have workd

    moving on sucks.
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't really explain why this struck a chord. Well I imagine I could. But I'm not going to! It's touching really. I mean, it's an acknowledgement that you didn't do your best, what you could have done. And didn't treat this person how maybe you should have treated this person. Hell, but aren't we all guilty of that. The admittance of being afraid is what gets me though. Not alone, but still afraid. Just the very best part. It has strength, but at the same time, it has a great sense of dependance on the person.
    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by Talamir | [ Reply to This ]


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