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    dots Submission Name: I'm gone?dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 1064
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I wrote this a year ago to someone that I continue to care for. It's kind of a depressing love thing. the pic is from somewhere on google.


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    Living in a world,
    so full of messes,
    full of cries.

    It makes you wonder,
    would anything change,
    if I were to die?

    Would I be missed,
    could anyone care,
    or would they go about their daily lives?

    Would the earth be affected,
    how could it change,
    could it stop spinning all because of me?

    Stop dead on it axis,
    leaving those I love in the shadows,
    or would they be lucky and in the light?

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    Little would change if I were to die.
    People would live there lives the way they do.

    One might be affected,
    that one would be you.

    You watched me as I suffered,
    I told you nothing was wrong.

    You loved me, held me,
    told me no matter what you would protect me.

    You couldn't defend me from this,
    It wasn't your fight to win.

    This silent killer,
    No one could detect.

    I'm sorry my love,
    I'm already dead.




    Submitted on 2007-11-16 20:54:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This silent killer,
    No one could detect.

    I'm sorry my love,
    I'm already dead.


    This i think is the best part. I can feel your pain.
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by Jay92 | [ Reply to This ]
      well !! the earth won't wstop spinning around... but there are tones of people who will be missing you writings...

    I think if you really loved this person back, you wouldnt feel dead !! Isn't it true ??

    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent Job
    You described the pain one feels frombeing alone perfectly
    I believe you are writing of someone whos relationship has failed and they despertly want that Love back but cant seem to figure out how to do It
    I do guarantee you one thing
    Everyone of us passes on memories that live forever
    So In effect we never truly die as our Memories will Live on Forever
    Great Job
    I will be Praying for you
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please keep in touch!!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW. i liked this one. but i like almost all of your stuff. i loved this. good job!
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      I just read a poem that was very much like this one. We all tend to get down from time to time and most of the time it is brought on by love lost or wished for. I like your style of writing.
    Keep it up.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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