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    dots Submission Name: Til Death do Us Part (pt 2)dots
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    Author: ravenwolf68
    ASL Info:    40/not enough/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 690/543/62
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTil Death do Us Part (pt 2)dots
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    She stopped to look at the moon
    Making them both miss the bus
    She wore a tight dress and heels
    Causing other men to stare

    She forgot he’d be home early
    And didn’t have dinner ready
    She didn’t set his alarm
    And he was late for his meeting

    She knew she deserved his love
    That he showed through her bruises
    It only hurt for awhile
    And it was after all her fault

    When they asked her what happened
    Through tears and sobs she shrugged
    She didn’t know why someone killed him
    He was the only man in her world

    She stared at her father with hate
    He looked at her not understanding
    Wondering if he’d ever see again
    The beautiful daughter lost beneath blacks & blues

    He said they’d be together forever
    ‘Til death do they part
    He promised her that one day
    He’d kill her and then himself

    ~Ravenwolf




    Submitted on 2007-11-16 20:58:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Manipulation...it sucks...

    Excellent first two lines. Those were great. You are telling this story well.
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      What is most hard to accept is how abused women rationalize the abuser's behavior and "buy in" to accepting the blame. I must admit you have me thinking about my own father and his reactions to boys I dated. I'm certainly going to read part three. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Well... I guess he didn't get to keep that promise.

    "She didn’t know why someone killed him"

    That's interesting, but I believe it.

    I can't help but admit it pisses me off though. I don't even have sympathy for those people anymore. I probably shouldn't feel that way, but if someone chooses to put up with that, then I really don't care... I'm too tired to. I've seen so much of it that I'm just sick of it now, you know?

    Also, my dad will happily shoot at anyone who even looks at me wrong, so I understand her father too. Don't worry though... he's on some good medication now to control his behavior. ;)

    Anyway, I love this one too. The details really pulled me in.

    You're brilliant.
    | Posted on 2007-11-16 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]



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