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    dots Submission Name: Jezebel (Fine Seduction)dots
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    Author: SYnesthesiA_WaR
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 21/24/24
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 119
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 984



    Description:
       uh..... this was one of those things that floats around in your head for weeks before u finally decide to just write it already...


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    dotsJezebel (Fine Seduction)dots
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    Jezebel,
    Singing softly,
    Her voice is light and fine,
    As Jezebel’s dying embers
    Rain down slowly upon mine…

    Walking with this Jezebel,
    It's evil scorched our sky,
    Her lips are cold; her body sold,
    Her hair is gold, divine…

    Jezebel’s body writhes,
    smothered in heavy midnight sin,
    The tide brings darling Jezebel,
    The sea invites her in…

    Oh, she taunts the ghosts of kings;
    They mourn her,
    Egyptian cotton; jewels adorn her,
    Jezebel’s ripest beauty flows
    As nettle wine and gin…

    Her lips, they part in slumber, and
    Her skin a ghastly hue,

    She smiles at his serpent's roar,
    Fallen is Babylon’s finest whore,

    Yet even as her heartbeat ceases, and
    Virtue subcumbs to the heart’s diseases,
    As Jezebel’s fine seduction,
    We are ravenous, impure…




    Submitted on 2007-11-17 01:16:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      fu#kin great... I like it, It takes me back. Yr Imagery is good I can see that you wright,
    like I do. You can tell She is hot.............but
    there is something left in the backdrop, It is
    said but not spoken of. Good Job.

    Joshua
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
    i adoreses this one!!!!! tis favorited dear sue!
    although it took you long enough to actually make yourself write, it payed off.

    for the most part it flows really well, and i love the rhymes, they don't seem forced at all

    and wouldn't you know, i shall now share with you my favorite part, because it's quite fun to do i must say! here:

    Walking with this Jezebel,
    Whose evil scorched my sky,
    Her lips are cold; her body sold,
    Her hair is gold, divine…

    Jezebel’s body writhes,
    Entrenched in heavy midnight sin,
    The tide brings darling Jezebel,
    The sea invites us in…

    Oh, she taunts the ghosts of kings;
    They mourn her,
    Egyptian cotton; jewels adorn her,

    perhaps that is a rather long "favorite part" but who cares lol

    nice job! YAY! for no more writers' block for us!

    ~chaos~
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]



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