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    dots Submission Name: A Meaningless Dreamdots
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    Author: brokenXdreamer
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       confusing??

    yes...


    meaningless??

    idk...

    whats it about??

    you tell me


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    dotsA Meaningless Dreamdots
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    there she stood
    on the shore of dreams
    she looks in love
    or, so it sems...

    her love is forbidden
    his trust is forgot
    their hearts are both broken
    for each other; they have not

    she stands and waits
    for him to reply
    but without ihs answer
    she starts to cry

    crying for the lover she once had
    the memories of love-lights beam
    but as she realisez what love really is
    she awakes and sees it was a meaningless dream

    not a year has gone by
    that she cant recall
    that man she loved
    he. who let her fall

    she fell so hard
    for his once true love
    her love so pure
    like the whitest dove

    and now she sits
    with her diamond ring
    a new love was found
    Oh! what a beautiful thing

    she has found a new heart
    full of love and things
    like memories of dreams and hope
    and that love held together by strings




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