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    dots Submission Name: Cupiddots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCupiddots
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    Cupid takes aim
    Strikes in stride
    And fires into the dark
    Blindly hitting his mark.
    His feathers falling
    Onto chocolate hearts.
    Up all night
    By candle light,
    The poetic part.
    Sing along
    To all the love songs
    Written in a bleeding heart.




    Submitted on 2007-11-18 01:00:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't know why, but I find this one humorus.
    "Fires into the dark, blindly hitting his mark"...sounds like some drunk guy playing around with a bow and arrow! Lol.

    Humor aside, I liked this write.

    ~KimbreRain
    | Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      I've read this 3 times. I liked it the first time, had some lines strike me the 2nd time and this time it has just grown on me.
    It's short, that's why it took me a couple of times before commenting, but it works short.

    There's a nice contrast between the whole "Cupid the little love spreader" and the reality of the whole vd spreader...

    Your last three lines were really excellent. It wraps up the write and sums it up well.

    Very well written,

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]


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