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    dots Submission Name: So tall dots
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    Author: YvonneJoyce
    ASL Info:    16, f, wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.92 - 11/13/24
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSo tall dots
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    You see this girl she stands so tall,
    But no one sees behind it all.

    It’s been so long since I’ve seen the light,
    Hanging onto that everlasting fight.

    Grinding my teeth with this sad heart break,
    A smile that I will always have to fake.

    The scars on my wrist will have to stay,
    The razor was my best friend; it took the pain away.

    Thru it all I thought it would go away,
    But it hasn’t yesterday, and not today.

    So I go on hour by hour, day by day
    Wishing the pain will just go away.

    I can’t say how I wish I could go back,
    To that one night when you took a whack.

    Maybe things will be better without you,
    Because I never held it, that to be true.

    Deep inside my black heart bleeds.
    While in my hands the rosary beads.

    The gun is loaded; I throw it to the floor.
    Now there is nothing, I can do more.

    So I am about to pull this trigger one more time,
    I leave you my soul to find.

    It’s buried deep inside those long full years,
    But they have just had too many tears.

    So I am gone while you are still there,
    Why couldn’t you be the one, who took the care?




    Submitted on 2007-11-18 18:45:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem made me think about the popular girls at my school, who can get in front of the classroom, say whatever the hell they want and not feel nervous (or so it seems). If I try to get up in front of the class, my knees and voice shake and everything sounds far off. Your poem did a good job at making me think about those "popular" girls, that they, too, are just high school girls whose act of bravery is just that; an act.
    I can relate very well to the lines about the razor, in fact I just wrote a poem about it called "Finding Asylum". The feeling of being trapped in one place in your life and not being able to get out of it is probably one of the worst feelings I've ever experienced.
    Overall, I can't see why this poem doesn't have more comments. People around here just seem to want to look at poems rather than comment on them. But anyways...very enjoyable write. Peace....

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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