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    dots Submission Name: The Fire Pitdots
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    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    17/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 141/148/71
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 195
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       I've written recently, but not inspired, as now. Ignoring form. Night dreams under the same stars.


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    dotsThe Fire Pitdots
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    Flames dwindle
    that once roared
    in this fire pit.

    Living life, who stops
    and realizes the naure of
    our single day
    autumn possessions?
    when we replace them with
    so many others.

    First you toss a lit match
    into a puddle of charcoal fluid
    and bask in the heat of a
    searing moment.


    Although, if anybody
    was judging, best would be
    to carefully arrange the logs
    and diligently spin a twig between
    two sweating, blistering palms
    and fan the kindling
    that gasps for the first breath
    like a newborn child.

    A fire consumes its origins,
    and roars defiantly for a
    while. I swear, I realize the delicacy
    of all this. We are not boiling a stew
    within Hephaestus' forge. We are not
    ever-so-gently crisping marshmallows
    over dying embers.

    The late Frieda Kahlo has taken
    the liberty of cutting out two
    hearts to hang above
    a hearth,
    when we
    must find a way to
    keep them warm

    and keep them beating.

    Does it feel like we are about to toss
    the last substantial fuel into the hungry pit?
    Do we fear all knowledge that wood burns
    and that others will simply
    sing Kumbaya above our ashes?


    I do not think so. This is,
    after all,
    the era of
    renewable energy.
    ~~~





    Submitted on 2007-11-19 05:53:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is so much going on in this one body of work. You gave me countless images to dwell on and yet to interpret in my own obnoxious way.

    I liked the part about throwing a match into the "puddle of charcoal fluid". Why does that stick? I have no idea.

    And the hearts above the mantle. I was impressed with that as well.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm at work, and I should definitely be doing anything that isn't this. Oh well.

    The image of this is what catches me off guard. There is an entire poem here that is whispering words at me all soft and crackly like fire, giving off screen shots in Technicolor of Frida Kahlo and frozen hearts being singed in front of brick fireplace and babies made of wood and somebody sticking their hands into their jeans pockets and watching charcoal fluid burn bright enough to take an entire layer off the ozone. But the picture my mind creates first, before any of the other things collide with it in my head, is you sitting there, staring into the fire and your face glowing from the flames with a notebook and pencil in your hands, and you're writing this.

    ~~~
    | Posted on 2008-02-20 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      "First you toss a lit match
    into a puddle of charcoal fluid
    and bask in the heat of a
    searing moment. "

    This has to be my favorite stanza. I just love the idea of the recklessness of it. I also enjoyed your Mythological reference. Good job.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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