Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Coagulate dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Mandolin
    ASL Info:    10/15/89
    Elite Ratio:    5.4 - 131/145/85
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1475



    Description:
       I believe I'm trying to write myself empty so my head will let me sleep. If this comes of as pitiful - pity it, it's really just draining and I'm sleeplessly so very tired.....
    which are where words slip out.......
    drip
    drip
    drip.....

    I bet it's sticky. Sorry for all the heart bleeding, a few of you met recognize the roots of this.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCoagulate dots
    -------------------------------------------


    I would like to be dancing
    but this bodys music Im lacking;
    music that was laughing and panting,
    music that was color and thought;
    but my nights are too still for these things
    and this heart is much too sore.
    My excuses are true and exist only to substantiate.
    Weary, am I, and wanting.
    Strange am I?
    Not so strange to recede into thoughtlessness,
    and seek the lovely absentness of sleep.
    Nothingness is tempting me quiet,
    ever so absently, tempting me tender.
    To wane and ebb and disappear,
    I exist yet evanesce in my dangerous peace,
    I seep into the lulling nirvana of false comfort.
    Alone and longing in a unselfish loneliness.
    and the numbing songs of silence come calling,
    calling with the voice of fresh fallen snow;
    calling, calling like wind in the Queen Annes Lace.
    I too am calling, calling.
    My hours are passing, seasons are changing.
    My mind is hot and thick and ill,
    words come sapping the imagery from an aching mind
    that is so multiplied in its baffled unhappiness
    that it cannot run itself out into happy emptiness.
    If the body rests ever so still with warmth waxing away
    I just might hear song of solidity and presence,
    the music of wholeness and presence,
    song that sings of friendship and withness
    heard only in the silent roar of being apart.




    Submitted on 2007-11-19 14:16:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Better giveup on that Queen Ann's Lace least you become like it when folding its seed into an empty nest.
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say that I like this.

    I like it, and yet,



    it seems a bit self absorbed.

    But I feel like I understand it, possibly relate.
    It's mature, but there is something refreshing about it as well.


    Love these lines:
    "...words come sapping the imagery from an aching mind
    that is so multiplied in its baffled unhappiness
    that it cannot run itself out into happy emptiness."

    An endless need to express,
    honing the art of expression.

    At least...

    that's what I drew from it.

    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Puzzle_d_Box | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    153121

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry