The jester and the king by Mr.Ordinary

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Submission Name: The jester and the king dots

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Author:	Mr.Ordinary
ASL Info:	21/M/Navy
Elite Ratio:	3.17 - 64/102/41
Words:	49

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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i dont have half and idea what i was thinking when i wrote this. however, it is quite possible i wrote this during a lector in class. i was mostly asleep.

The jester and the king dots

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Alles life a game
Simply not left from fame
The mothers poor soul
Indeed does weep
For the jest shall be feed
on the kings sheep

the king shall strike
on the long lost sun
time played afon
the jest no longer sings
his merry long songs

Submitted on 2007-11-19 14:31:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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oo!
very well done.
so much sialies and metaphores! i love it.
it is very well written and yay!
the only thing i have to say is to maybe make it a little bit longer or make another poem with the same basic structure that is a little bit longer. but other than that WONDERFUL!.

much love

annie!
| Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]

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