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    dots Submission Name: The jester and the kingdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 826
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    Bytes: 320



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       i dont have half and idea what i was thinking when i wrote this. however, it is quite possible i wrote this during a lector in class. i was mostly asleep.


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    dotsThe jester and the kingdots
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    Alles life a game
    Simply not left from fame
    The mothers poor soul
    Indeed does weep
    For the jest shall be feed
    on the kings sheep

    the king shall strike
    on the long lost sun
    time played afon
    the jest no longer sings
    his merry long songs




    Submitted on 2007-11-19 14:31:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      oo!
    very well done.
    so much sialies and metaphores! i love it.
    it is very well written and yay!
    the only thing i have to say is to maybe make it a little bit longer or make another poem with the same basic structure that is a little bit longer. but other than that WONDERFUL!.

    much love



    annie!
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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