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    dots Submission Name: The End Of Daysdots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    28
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 70/87/51
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 216
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1162



    Description:
       SLEEP WELL MR. PRESIDENT


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    dotsThe End Of Daysdots
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    Atomic flash,the dragons breath,
    Marching under flags of death .
    We have always fought what we fear,
    And we all feel that the end is near.

    The earth know warms by the heat of mans fire,
    sacrifice it all for progress and desire.
    Pass the wieght of the past onto the next generation,
    while we burn the last of the earths vegetation.

    The proficys are all coming true,
    the tabloids say it's nothing new.
    We all sit back and we watch the world burn,
    We all start to feel our stomachs turn.

    Now the beast we created is out of controll,
    It may be impossible to crawl out of this hole.
    We critisize free thinking people while following profiteers,
    obey like sheep while the end creeps near.

    Media induced polliticly forcefed,
    hate to say it but we made our own bed.
    We run in circles worriying about every disease,
    While we burn the last of the rainforests trees.

    This is not a tabloid, so Knowone will probobly read,
    trying to spread the message,trying to plant a seed.




    Submitted on 2007-11-19 18:06:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it...
    I am not big into rhymes, but how you set it up, it flows
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by afullmetalwar | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written! you have a talent for making words flow. great write!
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good use of rhymes. I agree with your poem. We created our own Hell.

    The only nitpicks I have is some typos and it's one HUGE stanza, instead of multiple stanzas.

    Other than that, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by EseanB | [ Reply to This ]


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