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To a lost friend

Author: Jan
ASL Info:    19/female/PA
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I don't like punctuation that much. It confused me in this poem.

To a lost friend

I wish that I could only see
what was right infront of me
The pain that was inside her eyes
there are no words that can describe
the pain she felt for all those years
the pain she felt when she shed those tears
she held it all up inside her heart
if only I knew from the start
I should have been there when she needed me
How selfish can I really be?
I should have been a true friend
instead I faught with her till her end
it's sad to know and sad to see
the pain I caused for her and me
She left behind no mark or trace
Just a school picture of an emotionless face
but now I know she is in a better place
and I will see her soon
but at my own pace

Submitted on 2004-06-24 11:14:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey jess its AJ, this is really good, i like it alot, the words you used flowed perfectly, Every thing about it just pulled together so well you did an awsome job...Solemn star
| Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem I think is very sympathetic and that its very sadning for anybody actually. I just want to know one thing I hope I ain't going back to bad memories or anything its just that is this friend dead or alive?
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
  You expressed the regret that you feel wonderfully. You hint that your friend may have passed on... in any case, you showed us a sliver of your pain and for that I am greatful. Thank you!
| Posted on 2004-06-24 00:00:00 | by walkingman | [ Reply to This ]

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