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    dots Submission Name: This Way to Obliviondots
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    Author: Coeur Lazulis
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 37/21/6
    Words: 361
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       "The soul belongs to God, but the body belongs to us." Grigori Rasputin.


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    I.

    "This Way to Oblivion"
    is crucified to a tree.
    An uncertain arrow aims
    down a forgotten road
    congealed with dust;
    the day, poisoned with twilight,
    has already decayed.

    Time remains an open grave,
    its headstone lost amidst
    epiphanies and revelations,
    prophets and poets,
    silent elegies and bitter hopes.


    II.

    For years now I’ve strayed this path,
    and Wisdom scatters into the trees;
    some Truth always slipping from my grasp.
    Slipping? You’ve never bothered
    to close your fingers.

    It’s difficult to hold something
    that’s never become incarnate.
    Your existence, you mean.
    Your archaic voice has deserted
    what you still call a body.

    I’ve only done it for you, you see...
    For me? Seven years, my darling.
    Seven years I’ve been clawing
    at this unforgiving coffin.


    Seven years? How many
    anniversaries have abandoned
    our calendar? How many
    days have thawed away
    under the absence of
    your heat? How many
    minutes have ticked unnoticed,
    when, without you, Time
    has morphed into anarchism?

    Time remains an open grave—
    Time is but an open window!
    And I will crawl through
    the jagged shards of glass
    still left on the sill, if
    they will lead me to you.

    I’ve never left you...
    you are seeking someone
    who has long ascended
    into the fathomless depths
    of tonight’s moonless sky.

    I have beseeched that sky...
    Its austere stars deceive me
    with their perjury.

    Why do you insist?
    Six feet and an infinity
    keep me from holding you.

    I am afraid of forgetting
    the exact tenure of your voice,
    or the aurora in your eyes...
    This is why I insist,
    this madness I’ve endured...
    Anyone who chooses to be mad
    can also choose to be sane.

    I would choose insanity over
    losing the sensation of your
    skin against mine—
    insanity over the thought
    that in another life,
    in another beginning,
    you wouldn’t have taken me
    on that moonlit walk.

    Do you see, my darling...
    I have never left you.
    It is you who have departed...





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      An excerpt from Voltaire's Philosophical Dictionary, which rings true when compared to this, I feel (and also to your first post "Deus ex Machina"):

    "We are intelligent beings: intelligent beings cannot have been formed by a crude, blind, insensible being: there is certainly some difference between the ideas of Newton and the dung of a mule. Newton's intelligence, therefore, came from another intelligence.

    When we see a beautiful machine, we say that there is a good engineer, and that this engineer has excellent judgment. The world is assuredly an admirable machine; therefore there is in the world an admirable intelligence, wherever it may be. This argument is old, and none the worse for that.

    All living bodies are composed of levers, of pulleys, which function according to the laws of mechanics; of liquids which the laws of hydrostatics cause to circulate perpetually; and when one thinks that all these beings have a perception quite unrelated to their organization, one is overwhelmed with surprise.

    The movement of the heavenly bodies, that of our little earth round the sun, all operate by virtue of the most profound mathematical law. How Plato who was not aware of one of these laws, eloquent but visionary Plato, who said that the earth was erected on an equilateral triangle, and the water on a right-angled triangle; strange Plato, who says there can be only five worlds, because there are only five regular bodies: how, I say, did Plato, who did not know even spherical trigonometry, have nevertheless a genius sufficiently fine, an instinct sufficiently happy, to call God the "Eternal Geometer," to feel the existence of a creative intelligence? Spinoza himself admits it. It is impossible to strive against this truth which surrounds us and which presses on us from all sides."



    All bodies, all conversations, eventually turn into dust and scatter; I guess the impermanence of life is what makes it so special, and so bewildering. There is loss and heartache in this piece, so many questions pertaining to abstractions which we call God. Tragic revelations.

    Epic.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      I was quite stunned by this poem. I'll start by saying that it bears a striking resemblance to one of my favorite poems: "Sunday Morning" by Wallace Stevens. But anyways, that caught my attention, and it was the poem itself that maintained that attention. I am really at a lack of a way to express myself now, as this has quite literally taken the breath out of me.
    Generally: awesome imagery, and great blending of thoughts and visions. The rhythm flows and the structure works very well.
    Definitely a favorite!
    PS: I'm sorry for the lack of constructive input in this comment, but there's really nothing that I can add!
    | Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by Saidin | [ Reply to This ]
      But just wait. Your impatience is insane. He has gone to prepare a place for you so you may be with him always.. It takes a great while to carve a mansion out of gold and make streets out of silver. Remember he did not deceive nor promise he was a magician. He is a true carpenter who lays the foundation and lets the idea build upon itself. Just think about it, there is no need for the sun, he is the light illuminating the realm.
    I loved the thoughts you so expertly placed throughout the poem. Give me more to read and see how the majesty of thought can illuminate my waywardness.
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Can I just comment on the first part? I am being lazy and tired but I want to at least say that I have read this, and to not leave a comment is rather rude as it is worthy of remarks (maybe not mine but worthy just the same)...

    "This way to oblivion"... something like that isn't it?
    I love the thought of:

    the day, poisoned with twilight,
    has already decayed.

    because it does doesn't it? That moment between light and dark becomes grey, merging the two.

    I think my favorite is the last stanza. It is just a remarkable statement. As each moment becomes a filler, tossed in, never quite buried, never quite marked. Time is a funny thing. It either makes you or breaks you.



    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]



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