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    dots Submission Name: Recklessdots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 5/24/19
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    Bytes: 341



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    Memories stand on the window sill waiting to be
    freed,
    Perhaps I'll let them free, they do me no good waiting here,
    I'll break that window, but the memories will fall to their deaths,
    It's a shame memories don't have wings, maybe someone will learn from my mistakes.






    Submitted on 2007-11-19 22:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Superb.

    But you did change tenses in the middle of it which threw me off.

    Read it with these changes and you'll notice it flows way better (due to the tense-changing thing).

    Anyway, superb, really.

    Memories stand on the window sill waiting to be
    freed,
    Perhaps I'll let them free, they do me no good waiting here,
    I'll break that window, the memories will fall to their deaths,
    It's a shame memories don't have wings, maybe someone will learn from my mistakes.
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by Inkybro | [ Reply to This ]


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