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    dots Submission Name: A Dreamdots

    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Dreamdots

    Tell me that I am only sleeping,
    That this is all just a bad dream.
    Please don't say that you've left me,
    And torn my heart at the seam.

    The days are so cold now.
    And the nights are much too lonely.
    I wander this life alone,
    Seeking only your sweet company.

    You left me so quickly,
    That I never had the chance,
    To savor the joy
    Of a soft summer's dance.

    But, alas, my heart has been broken.
    And the pieces are scattered about.
    I yearn to wake from this dream,
    And throw this sad memory out.

    Submitted on 2004-06-24 11:15:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So similar to the feelings that I once had...A dream, don't we wish it were true...But this isn't a dream...It is only a dark event that has happened to you...If only this was fiction, if only this was some kind of story...If this was only some kind of twisted fairy tale...But it is not...For in these eyes we've seen tradgedy, and they are not sleeping eyes for they are awoken...These matter of events fair or unfair...They leave us with this outcome from our heart, and some refuse to say it's all not true, I did...It was denial that held me up for so long, then I began missing things, and relizing that people that I've lost aren't coming back...This wasn't a dream, then I hit major depression with a huge amounts of triggers that just drug me down and down again...Falling as if there were nothing that my body could smash on, and make this nightmare end...All piled up stacked high...I was weak, and I hope you aren't either...May everything be with you through these devestating days...You did a wonder on this poem, and that's why I'm adding it to my favorites...
    | Posted on 2004-06-24 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      A nice piece. Wanting to escape reality ties in well with a break up or something like that. I can't think up any improvements at this time, though I can say that the stanza is definately the best. Have a nice day.
    | Posted on 2004-06-24 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

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