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    dots Submission Name: Making Dreams Come Truedots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Relentlessly combat life's exceeding pace


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    dotsMaking Dreams Come Truedots
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    Holding hands and walking together,
    We make our dreams come true.
    It's just reaching out to one another,
    It's up to me and you.

    It can happen when we begin
    To realise that we should heed,
    Needs of people in the world we live in,
    The people that we need.

    It can happen if we relentlessly combat
    With life's exceeding pace.
    If only we stopped and gathered the strength that
    Fights the fears and foes we face.

    It's worth pursuing that golden goal,
    Challenging though it may seem.
    It will satisfy your very soul
    For life's just like a dream




    Submitted on 2007-11-19 23:47:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good work Megan! I really love your opening stanza and felt it was exceptionally perceptive because life is up to me and you.

    "Holding hands and walking together,
    We make our dreams come true.
    It's just reaching out to one another,
    It's up to me and you."

    I also liked the alliteration in "Fights the fears and foes we face."

    :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very up beat and light hearted post. Its refresing to read. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very up beat and light hearted post. Its refresing to read. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very up beat and light hearted post. Its refresing to read. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful piece of inspiration and reminds me of my mantras I like to say daily. Anything is possible and I love your encouraging sharing. I am an optimist and really enjoyed this piece! Great work & a fav for me to read often to remind myself!

    Happy Day!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem. It was very hopeful and grand. I do agree with Karrie in that it did seem to taper off a touch at the end. Regardless, I really enjoy this piece and am planning on reading more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by enigmaticone | [ Reply to This ]
      Megan, I was delighted to see a new post by you! Your new poem is excellent, full of hope and it offers optimism and great advice! Delightful work!
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      The begining was really strong but near the end it seemed to taper off.

    Your a good writer just try to keep momentum through out the poem!
    YAY!

    ~Karrie
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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