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    dots Submission Name: Carbon-Copy Beautifuldots
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    Author: awastedsky
    Elite Ratio:    5.48 - 103/120/80
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 116
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 815



    Description:
       You're my poison, darling.


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    dotsCarbon-Copy Beautifuldots
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    Little girl, you are carbon-copy beautiful.

    Faded around the edges like a downward smile
    Like a photographic accident
    A lucky one, no less?

    And maybe you lack the stars that make their homes in my eyes
    Maybe you're the volume turned down.
    But those open arms that accept you never held me quite as close.
    Because I can hold back?

    I can smile with sincerity because I am buried treasure
    But your enigmatic nature is just a façade that you didn't even create.

    Yeah,
    I drank the poison but I didn't feel better
    I drank the poison but I didn't feel better
    I drank the poison but I didn't feel better
    And I'm handing the vial off to you.
    So unwillingly.




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 00:10:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is very interesting! Is the enigma of this piece an accident? I'm pretty sure it's not :)
    You have some very original phrases that stand out. Nothing seemed forced. I could've done without the repitition, but I know it served the purpose to meant for it to.
    nice work!

    nicely
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one! Reminds us all life is not perfect.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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