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    dots Submission Name: Midnight's Cloakdots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 607
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMidnight's Cloakdots
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    Deep within midnight's cloak
    An eternity of thought begins
    Of lights and colors with shades of gray
    Confess desires within

    Nameless faces, crowdless places
    Lost and yet you're found
    To recognize familiar voices
    They echo from all around

    The warmth of hands that hold you tight
    "Please never let me go..."
    The fragrant scent of love's sweet tone
    That tells us what we know

    And now to soar in cloudless skies
    To unseen destinies
    That which is has never been
    To dive beneath the deepest seas

    A little bit of eternity
    A lifetime in between
    As moments pass you by
    Forever it would seem

    The wildest flowers sometimes bloom
    Upon a faded glance
    Through midnight's cloak you see them
    The Angel's feathered dance

    But dawn has opened tired eyes
    In my dreams, I saw you there
    A moment in forever
    The precious time that we shall share




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 05:50:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi again. I find this poem flowing well and after I digested it with feeling I find a glimmer of your Soul cleverly hiding between the words and the unspoken thought that surface in between. I appreciate your style that is very similar to mine. I gave u a 5 but a 404 error appeared which cannot explain. I happens all the time.
    Well keep up the good word. Regards. Jm..
    | Posted on 2012-02-19 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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