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    dots Submission Name: Forbidden Sanitydots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 145/114/65
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Such that these words I write
    Their meaning holds so true
    Withholding of pretense
    No cause to effect or misconstrue

    Taken in but taken back
    A glimpse of fate to share
    For only just a moment
    Such feelings without compare

    A dusty window
    Where the sun strays in
    In the shade of our friendship
    Who is this paladin?

    Forgiven in so many ways
    Forgotten in many more
    These enchanted memories
    Let them continue, I implore

    In as much a dream
    Let me see your smile
    It tells me more than words
    To let my senses reconcile

    Like Lancelot for Guinevere
    He was always there
    Held his love deep down inside
    So just the same I shall care

    Forgive me for this I ask
    To not deprive my honesty
    Painted in tomorrow
    My forbidden sanity




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 05:53:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I always or almost always favor something that rhymes so I enjoyed reading this. It does seem to jump around a little theme wise but that is not uncommon and does force you to think or imagine.
    | Posted on 2010-11-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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