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    dots Submission Name: Nothing Moredots
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    Author: krs3332003
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    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsNothing Moredots
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    When words fail to reveal
    The beauty in our hearts
    As time stands still
    With seconds to impart

    The chances of tomorrow
    Are surrounded by fate
    Resting wings so silent
    They seem to contemplate

    Nothing more to say
    The subtle winds of change
    Nothing more to show
    An ebb of disarrange

    Entangled luminous thought
    The reflection in their eyes
    Saturated with softness
    For sentimental reprise

    In the corridors of truth
    Stand a faithful few
    Reconciling the masses
    From brilliance born anew

    Nothing more to feel
    The nethermost part to grieve
    Nothing more to dream
    The distant call to believe

    In abstract echoes
    The voices disappear
    They sleep their weary heads
    On pillows made so sheer

    A kite in the wind
    An invisible guiding hand
    The words from a muse
    To help to understand

    Nothing more for tears
    A resolution that is sought
    Nothing more but love
    The hope that it has brought




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 05:55:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      u have a strange way with words that flowers quite nicely into blooms of consciousness and feeling.
    It is true that few can relate to this stanza:

    "In the corridors of truth
    Stand a faithful few
    Reconciling the masses
    From brilliance born anew"

    Be it science be it faith be it altered states of consciousness:
    "In abstract echoes
    The voices disappear
    They sleep their weary heads
    On pillows made so sheer".

    It is a stanza that speaks of hope and love:
    "Nothing more for tears
    A resolution that is sought
    Nothing more but love
    The hope that it has brought".

    I have a tendency to seek out "0" comms and bring some light.

    Good poem well written. regards jm




    | Posted on 2012-02-19 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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