fire the life the life blood of the phoenix. It's birth comes from what it's death was as it flys across the world never stopping for those who hate it a bird of pride a bird of death and rebirth striveing to live in the hearts of myth and leagend and in the hearts of those who still belive of it's existance
This does still look in the pre-writing stage, however you said you wanted some opinions on how to reform it. First, edit it up, making it longer, do whatever, go over it with a fine-tooth comb and edit it.
Second: Description. It would be nice for a little background, and like you told me, it's confusing, personally, it's not. Maybe it's just because I get my special philosophical powers from the night, (lol, kidding) but I think I personally understand it. Fire is the warmth that is within everything--volcanoes, the core of the earth, a candle, and regardless what form that's what it gives. And light too.
It may cause destruction, but that's not it's overall purpose.
Submission Name: phionex rise
