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    dots Submission Name: Panic Attackdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 608
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Yes, this is me in my awful side. It scares the hell out of you. Please read to see.


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    dotsPanic Attackdots
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    Confused... unable to think with clarity
    Afraid...filled with fear.
    My hands they shake with terror,
    Unable to hold on any longer.

    I want to scream loud, yell out for help.
    I open my mouth but fear fills it up again.
    I see the world dim colors as it fades away.
    No tears fall out or breaths taken in.

    Shear fear has opened my door
    and has let its self in.
    Could not walk to the other side,
    therefore I was not able to lock the door

    Fear closed the door to the outside,
    Reality lives in the open air
    and I cant be there no more.
    Afraid...filled with fear.


    Confused... unable to think with clarity
    I am really here, awake to the world.
    Hands still shake from a dream
    I can not take this no more.

    I opened the door to reality
    And I welcome it to come in.
    Please sit and stay awhile
    I am a true friend.

    I cry real tears that fall without a sound
    I pray someone see me again
    Before fear comes back around.
    I want to be me again.

    Just to be me again.




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 09:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The honesty in this piece makes it all the more compelling. Many struggle with fears, and I wish I had an easy answer that would help.

    "I cry real tears that fall without a sound
    I pray someone see me again
    Before fear comes back around.
    I want to be me again. "

    This stanza could not be any more descriptive and you have penned it for all who have been there.

    Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes fear can be an illusion of denial, or perhaps insecurity towards the world itself.

    I did like your personification of reality, calling yourself a friend to it. That was an interesting take, I don't think I've heard that one before. But, being afraid isn't an awful side, it's a common side. Everyone has it. The differences lie in how far you let you fear go, how much you let it stifle you.
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi thanx for the comment yor post was really good and i like the emotion it portrays

    it puts a good picture together of thoughts and personalities that one has to overcome

    well done and thanx

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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