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    dots Submission Name: Bittersweet Surrenderdots
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    Author: PrincessDoom13
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 79/80/39
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 53
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    Bytes: 479



    Description:
       Just another lonely day.


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    dotsBittersweet Surrenderdots
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    Light starts in a place,
    Surrounded by darkness,
    Seclusion accompanied with comfort.

    "Give in..."
    The bottle seductively coos.
    What is this loneliness?

    I (alone, again),
    Though there are billions
    Of people in this world.

    I sit in darkness.
    Secluded and excluded.
    Exiled, at best.

    Infinitely and forever
    Alone with my
    Bittersweet surrender.




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 14:08:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      there are times when i" enjoy" being lonely,
    i listen to nick cave, tom waites or joy division,really sad music.somehow i like being on my own at times, but it is not a forced loneliness,and theres nothong wrong with a few glasses of red wine,maybe i,m just different.

    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      I wonder...How the idea idea of being lonely, or even content with being lonely could be bittersweet. And not just bitter? Since I don't really believe anyone lonely can be any sort of happy. Darkness, and drink (to me) should not be comforting.

    "Infinitely and forever
    Alone with my
    Bittersweet surrender."

    I'm not sure why, but this didn't seem to mix well together, maybe if you added an ellipsis after "Alone with my"

    So it would be... "Alone with my...
    Bittersweet surrender"

    All opinion, so don't mind me. I'm sorry I didn't have more positive things to say. I wish I did, it's just the thought of being content with being lonely is ultimately depressing for me.

    Talamir
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Talamir | [ Reply to This ]



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