Love's Imposter by lynn marsters

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Submission Name: Love's Imposter dots

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Author:	lynn marsters
ASL Info:	20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 49/61/32
Words:	218

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Love's Imposter dots

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A slow embrace chills my spine

And I tried!

To say the words

And I tried

To reveal the reality

But too late,
Too far gone
Bathed in false light

Love’s imposter
An unending parody of truth

That sickens my soul
And she finds it so warm
She basks, and bathes, and is enveloped

She drowses and dozes
She fights to open her eyes

Only to find it impossible

Only to find that the warmth
(the blood)
Pouring down her face
(across her lips)
Seeping steadily from the stitches
(that close her eyes)

Blinds her from reality

And she knows only lies

Submitted on 2007-11-20 14:39:22 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is really well written. I read through a few times, and I really don't know what's going on.
Maybe you can give me a hint, and I'll re-read.
I like the mystique, it makes me keep reading.
Thanks for sharing this.

Nicely
| Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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