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    dots Submission Name: Love's Imposterdots

    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLove's Imposterdots

    A slow embrace chills my spine

    And I tried!

    To say the words

    And I tried

    To reveal the reality

    But too late,
    Too far gone
    Bathed in false light

    Love’s imposter
    An unending parody of truth

    That sickens my soul
    And she finds it so warm
    She basks, and bathes, and is enveloped

    She drowses and dozes
    She fights to open her eyes

    Only to find it impossible

    Only to find that the warmth
    (the blood)
    Pouring down her face
    (across her lips)
    Seeping steadily from the stitches
    (that close her eyes)

    Blinds her from reality

    And she knows only lies

    Submitted on 2007-11-20 14:39:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really well written. I read through a few times, and I really don't know what's going on.
    Maybe you can give me a hint, and I'll re-read.
    I like the mystique, it makes me keep reading.
    Thanks for sharing this.

    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]

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