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    dots Submission Name: Not my lifedots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Description:
       .....i was sad...so it's not that great


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    dotsNot my lifedots
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    this is not your arm
    this is not your leg
    it's okay if you want to
    stain this band-aid

    this is not your life so
    stop tryin to be somebody else
    i've been livin a lie my whole life
    faking i was someone else

    this is not me
    not my life
    this is not real
    it's not right
    am i just waitin
    for something that'll never change
    oh this is not me
    not my life

    i wake up in the mornin
    it's an afternoon again
    i've been told to look to tomorrow
    if today would end

    this is not me
    not my life
    this is not real
    it's not right
    am i just waitin for somethin
    am i i just waitin
    oh this is not me
    not my life
    this is not real
    it's not right
    so sick of waitin for
    someting that'll never change
    this is not me
    not my life

    i wake up in the mornin
    it's an afternoon again




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 16:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can definitely relate to this. From beginning to end...I like the repetition in it, but one thing that erks me. Is the words like 'mornin'..Lol, its just me, they sound weird coming out of my mouth. Anyways, love the poem...I'm always waiting for something in my life to go array, just any sort of change, so that I can wake up from this twilight zone that I'm in, and find myself again.

    Loved it, and try to be happy.

    Lucy ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      This is Really sad
    To me this write speaks of a Person who it seems sadly has been waiting their whole life for their One True Love
    I Can Honestly say I have never experienced True Love as in a relationship so I know exactly of the feeling you are describing
    If you want to maybe touch this up in some places as the flow is a little off
    But I Stress that is totally up to you
    This is your write and I would never tell someone how to write
    I really liked the emotion you enclosed and displayed in this write
    Nice Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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