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    dots Submission Name: You push & I pulldots
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    Author: numbertwenty
    ASL Info:    16 Female
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 55/25/9
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 643
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 618



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    dotsYou push & I pulldots
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    Snow flakes in your eye lashes
    Rain drops on my skin.
    I love you with the core of me
    but this game I cannot win

    White angels on the snowy floor
    muddy foot prints in my puddle
    My eyes see the truth in you
    And all you are is double my trouble.

    Snow balls in the biggest heap
    A torrential down pour in the east
    My fingers feel the lust in you
    And many a tragedy they reap

    I cant feel you in the snowy cold
    I can't see in the acid rain
    You push and I pull
    This too is getting old.




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 19:00:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem is very good. your descriptions are great. good work
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your style #20! This was very good! A conflick that might never be solved? I will have to read more of your work.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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