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    dots Submission Name: The Last Cackle of the Hyenadots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Last Cackle of the Hyenadots
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    Oh what infinity Saharran landscape
    Within the fragile mind.
    Art thou so blind?
    Watching willfully, pressing in anxiety
    To the place called Africa.

    The environment dead shifts
    With putrid odors best left alone
    Unless...
    One can find heart to care for death.
    Tis that a breath?

    In the frigid air, lifts fog
    From perhaps a living breath strong
    Or maybe weak;
    Either way alive.

    However, the mind tends to play trickster.
    In the distance enter the cackle,
    The hyena-nature's despised child.
    And so he laughs.

    Is that his last,
    The last cackle of the Hyena?
    The minds hidden evil,
    The hated bastard child?




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 19:37:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ohhh...very interesting.
    I felt like I was taking a tour and the tour guide was this fantastic poet hehe

    I loved hte flow of this: it flowed like sand in the wind...

    This concept of unknown places within ourselves/ our minds that we tend to stray away from is fantastic!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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