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    Author: Myopic
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 31/58/63
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    every whole
    becomes a piece
    as you lay there, waiting-
    emotionally
    flat-
    lining
    with intermittent surges
    of hopeful
    wishes upon
    multidimensional
    fibrous
    vibrations.
    your walls are your treads
    sped with motion
    completely devoid of
    the waves in
    the ocean.
    I am blank and
    there, yet not.
    I am four walls and a roof
    as every
    maintenance that exists will lay with
    me and watch
    the exploding,
    fantastic plasma super-heated
    light show supernova
    of all interpretation
    falling from
    under
    my feet.
    they
    slowly die-
    bed-
    ridden.

    sanctification of the
    creative-insane
    and
    force-
    feeding
    of the mundane.

    of f
    beat,
    no
    rhythm,
    circadian
    schism
    i will
    t r y m y h a r d e s t
    to
    keep
    my
    se lf (se lf)
    a
    wake
    a
    wake
    a
    wake
    a
    wake
    a
    wake

    I will keep my
    emotional flat-line
    as long as i have a voice to
    keep silent and muscles
    to atrophy -
    I will
    destroy them
    with all that
    I am.




    Submitted on 2007-11-20 21:02:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can not yet understand post-modern poetry.

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    it.

    Despite all that, this piece has an equivocal message that shines through the confusing letter-trick-thing.
    I like it. Even if it is post-modern and I

    C A N
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    it.

    :)
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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