This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: nicelyJ
Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999 /519 /73
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
Total Views: 1091
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 306


an old poem that I can't find, my attempt to re-write.


Angry with words for fleeing
Disagreeable beasts that I've
burdened myself with
in an attempt to pen something
of worth
but with all of my wrangling
what do I have to show
I have no choice
but to let the words go


Submitted on 2007-11-21 06:42:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  Disagreeable beasts that I've
burdened myself with
in an attempt to pen something
of worth

ToOoOoO long phrase... why don't you think you should try to make it bit shorter...

But in general I found in this piece something that reminds me of myself!!!
I really love it!!
Keep On GOod Working !!...
| Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?