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    dots Submission Name: Rustlerdots
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    Author: nicelyJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999/519/73
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 706
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    Description:
       an old poem that I can't find, my attempt to re-write.


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    dotsRustlerdots
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    Angry with words for fleeing
    Disagreeable beasts that I've
    burdened myself with
    in an attempt to pen something
    of worth
    but with all of my wrangling
    what do I have to show
    I have no choice
    but to let the words go


    NicelyJ




    Submitted on 2007-11-21 06:42:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Disagreeable beasts that I've
    burdened myself with
    in an attempt to pen something
    of worth

    ToOoOoO long phrase... why don't you think you should try to make it bit shorter...

    But in general I found in this piece something that reminds me of myself!!!
    I really love it!!
    Keep On GOod Working !!...
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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