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Submission Name: who are you dots

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Author:	draconus
ASL Info:	16/male/uk
Elite Ratio:	1.73 - 45/91/55
Words:	41

Class/Type:	Poetry/Venting
Total Views:	87
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	253

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who are you dots

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who are you
in the window
looking at the sky
with purple glares
and deep thought pupils

who is that,
you are looking at
in the cloudless rain
is it you or is it me
in joy or in pain.

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